Two continuity issues. (Spoilers)
Posted: Thu Dec 01, 2005 7:01 pm
Hello,
I just wanted to say that I have absolutely adored your writing. I am sure I am not the only one. I wanted to mention two continuity problems though between the firestaff series and the initial book afterwards (I'm not completely caught up).
1.) the first time that Tarrin was at Mala Myr (the dwarven ruins) it was mentioned that there was a priest spell still active consecrating an area that Sarraya was. This is what protected her from the Sandmen before Jegojah recovered her. After this realization Tarrin figured that there still had to be Dwarves because their gods were Young Gods and wouldn't exist without followers. If their Gods didn't exist then that priest spell would not still be active. Yet in the "Dwarven Axe" book he acts as if that never happens and says frequently that all the Dwarves are dead.
2.) After Kerri gives birth to her child Tarrin says that Faalken (Kerri's child) was the tenth Sui'kun and that there were only supposed to be two Sui'kuns in reserve. In the Firestaff Collection the Goddess tells him that she was allowed to have 'three' extra not 'two'. The reason for the three is obviously that neither Tarrin, Sypder, or Jasana were going to have the temperment to control a tower for long periods of time. Since she wanted seven towers again that means she needed seven sui'kuns who would run those towers. Seven plus Tarrin, Sypder, and Jasana equals ten. not nine.
I am not finished with your "Dwarven Axe" book so I perfectly understand that there 'could' be some reason for the first point. Afterall you never 'wrote' Tarrins plan until it was time for him to 'perform' the plan. Thus treating anything that was written and the reader knew as what the 'Gods' knew. But I don't see how the second could just be a play on what the 'reader' knows. Again though, I want to stress that I 'love' the story and characters you have created and the stories you have written. I am sure I am not the only one with that opinon but I figure you can never get to much of a good thing. I have been trying to write my own story but it feels like trying to find the exit in a stadium in perfect blackness and no lights. lol I really think you should try to get this story published though because it truly is excellent. There are some publishers out there that don't care what you do with your story on the internet so you wouldn't even have to worry about the website if you did not want to. I am sure you have heard this before though. This message is getting to long though and so I will bid the goodbye and wish you good luck and godspeed.
I just wanted to say that I have absolutely adored your writing. I am sure I am not the only one. I wanted to mention two continuity problems though between the firestaff series and the initial book afterwards (I'm not completely caught up).
1.) the first time that Tarrin was at Mala Myr (the dwarven ruins) it was mentioned that there was a priest spell still active consecrating an area that Sarraya was. This is what protected her from the Sandmen before Jegojah recovered her. After this realization Tarrin figured that there still had to be Dwarves because their gods were Young Gods and wouldn't exist without followers. If their Gods didn't exist then that priest spell would not still be active. Yet in the "Dwarven Axe" book he acts as if that never happens and says frequently that all the Dwarves are dead.
2.) After Kerri gives birth to her child Tarrin says that Faalken (Kerri's child) was the tenth Sui'kun and that there were only supposed to be two Sui'kuns in reserve. In the Firestaff Collection the Goddess tells him that she was allowed to have 'three' extra not 'two'. The reason for the three is obviously that neither Tarrin, Sypder, or Jasana were going to have the temperment to control a tower for long periods of time. Since she wanted seven towers again that means she needed seven sui'kuns who would run those towers. Seven plus Tarrin, Sypder, and Jasana equals ten. not nine.
I am not finished with your "Dwarven Axe" book so I perfectly understand that there 'could' be some reason for the first point. Afterall you never 'wrote' Tarrins plan until it was time for him to 'perform' the plan. Thus treating anything that was written and the reader knew as what the 'Gods' knew. But I don't see how the second could just be a play on what the 'reader' knows. Again though, I want to stress that I 'love' the story and characters you have created and the stories you have written. I am sure I am not the only one with that opinon but I figure you can never get to much of a good thing.
I have been trying to write my own story but it feels like trying to find the exit in a stadium in perfect blackness and no lights. lol I really think you should try to get this story published though because it truly is excellent. There are some publishers out there that don't care what you do with your story on the internet so you wouldn't even have to worry about the website if you did not want to. I am sure you have heard this before though. This message is getting to long though and so I will bid the goodbye and wish you good luck and godspeed.