Shifters, test chapter.

Post by **Fel** » Fri Dec 20, 2013 9:16 pm

This is it, the test chapter I wrote for Shifters.

Constructive criticism welcome. Negative criticism...I know where you live. Remember that.

Enjoy.

konman · Post by **konman** » Fri Dec 20, 2013 9:33 pm

Thanks Fel

ralbloke · Post by **ralbloke** » Fri Dec 20, 2013 9:47 pm

Thanks Fel

Oh what we minions have to put up with!!

Yippeee

nachtdemon · Post by **nachtdemon** » Fri Dec 20, 2013 10:52 pm

Nice a second dose of fell tonight.

ralbloke · Post by **ralbloke** » Fri Dec 20, 2013 11:24 pm

No fair Fel

Write more now!!!

No wait

don't stop adding to inception
Don't stop adding to Earth Bond
Stop sleeping and write!!

Teaser is right!
This could go so many ways.

Thanks a million for all your efforts.

Ralph

zedd · Post by **zedd** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 2:31 am

Hi,
very very good first chapter. Please pretty please more

As usual great job. Just as a curiosity, I live something like 70 km south of a guarda

Regards

Post by **Fel** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 2:45 am

zedd wrote:Hi,
very very good first chapter. Please pretty please more

As usual great job. Just as a curiosity, I live something like 70 km south of a guarda

Regards

Well, mister expert, did I get things at least close to correct?

soulz · Post by **soulz** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 3:07 am

You Sir are an evil, evil person! Now the wait is on for more. Pretty exciting introduction to the story.

SYED · Post by **SYED** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 3:33 am

THanks, for the posting, just wondering when we start the endless and madening arguments, we should do it in the other stories section right, just checking.

Mizriath · Post by **Mizriath** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 9:53 am

Constructive criticism.

A bit short. Too short to figure out why Rafael and the pieces of tid bits with the necklace. Too short. Not long nough. Should have stop at least to say who Rafael is and why the shifters are after the necklace. That his father is one of them?? killed by the shifters, betrayed by the shifters cause he a jinnnn.. hmm. Not ehough juice. But good writing. Good start of a plot.

postal · Post by **postal** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 10:24 am

Very intriguing, would like to see more.

Thanks,
TJ

avalanche_man · Post by **avalanche_man** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 10:52 am

Excited for more of this. I have little idea where you are taking it, but if you pull in the occult into this... Man, could be your most intense work yet. Love it, thanks fel.

firedrake3 · Post by **firedrake3** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 1:47 pm

Awesome story. Can't wait to see where you go with it.

SoronelHaetir · Post by **SoronelHaetir** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 2:45 pm

Certainly an interesting start, thanks for the early Christmas present.

AgCOtter · Post by **AgCOtter** » Sat Dec 21, 2013 10:07 pm

Once again you cause a person to contemplate something other than our normal everyday life. Thank you. I look forward to seeing your expansion from this beginning.

Appreciate your good work Fel.

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