Errors in Subjugation
Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 1:37 pm
While re-reading Subjugation, I noticed a pair of errors in chapters 1 and 4. Tarrin and Jesmind are named, when it should have been Jason and Jyslin.
Chapter 1
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The first time Ailan had used his power on Jason, he had used his standard smoke and mirror trick to conceal his thoughts, and he felt Ailan immediately probe around the edges of it, trying to find a way through. Ailan had known that it was nothing but a defense, that his true thoughts were lurking beneath that misdirection. No female had ever managed to detect that, at least not that he knew of. Because of that, Tarrin had to use more crude but no less effective techniques, such as repetitive concentration on a single thought, which drowned out everything else. Ailan could only see his focus on getting his project set up and running, and for as long as he felt Ailan brushing up against his mind, he could think of nothing else. But after a few seconds, the tentative brushing stopped, and Tarrin dropped his repetition and got down to the business of checking the seals on his exchangers before powering up his PPG.
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Chapter 4
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“I doubt it’ll come to that,” he said carefully. “Tim’s too attracted to you to ever say no when you’re serious. I’ll take Jesmind somewhere and take her out of the equation, and that’ll make Tim comfortable enough. But,” he added, understanding that he needed some kind of positive response to her proposition in order to make her understand that he knew what she really was asking for, “if Tim won’t play, I’d be happy to take care of it for you, hon. We can’t have you running around in a state of frustration.”
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I also found a continuity error in chapter 20, when Jason is talking to Erinn.
quote:
“Yes, you do. You’re part of a, special, branch of the Karinne family line, same as me. All of us have telekinetic ability. I’m being trained in it myself, so I can’t train you. You’ll be trained by your cousin, Myleena Karinne. Once you’re fully trained, then you’ll help train others, and so on. Once we gather up all the lost members of the house and get everyone trained, then we’ll get back to the business of the house.”
end quote
This is before Jason learns that Myleena is telekinetic.
Minor errors, just distractions, but there is a note requesting that we inform when such things are found.
Nicolai
Chapter 1
quote
The first time Ailan had used his power on Jason, he had used his standard smoke and mirror trick to conceal his thoughts, and he felt Ailan immediately probe around the edges of it, trying to find a way through. Ailan had known that it was nothing but a defense, that his true thoughts were lurking beneath that misdirection. No female had ever managed to detect that, at least not that he knew of. Because of that, Tarrin had to use more crude but no less effective techniques, such as repetitive concentration on a single thought, which drowned out everything else. Ailan could only see his focus on getting his project set up and running, and for as long as he felt Ailan brushing up against his mind, he could think of nothing else. But after a few seconds, the tentative brushing stopped, and Tarrin dropped his repetition and got down to the business of checking the seals on his exchangers before powering up his PPG.
end quote
Chapter 4
quote
“I doubt it’ll come to that,” he said carefully. “Tim’s too attracted to you to ever say no when you’re serious. I’ll take Jesmind somewhere and take her out of the equation, and that’ll make Tim comfortable enough. But,” he added, understanding that he needed some kind of positive response to her proposition in order to make her understand that he knew what she really was asking for, “if Tim won’t play, I’d be happy to take care of it for you, hon. We can’t have you running around in a state of frustration.”
end quote
I also found a continuity error in chapter 20, when Jason is talking to Erinn.
quote:
“Yes, you do. You’re part of a, special, branch of the Karinne family line, same as me. All of us have telekinetic ability. I’m being trained in it myself, so I can’t train you. You’ll be trained by your cousin, Myleena Karinne. Once you’re fully trained, then you’ll help train others, and so on. Once we gather up all the lost members of the house and get everyone trained, then we’ll get back to the business of the house.”
end quote
This is before Jason learns that Myleena is telekinetic.
Minor errors, just distractions, but there is a note requesting that we inform when such things are found.
Nicolai
