Chapter 13. Tuesday? HA!!!!!!

[Ledsmith]

I'm just speculating for the sake of it.

NNNNOOOOOOO.....don't you see, thats just what Fel wants, its how he survives, our speculating fuels his evilness, must stop, must stop, can't fight it, irresistable urge to.......

So you think one of the uncles, or worse Sheila's own mother, could have set this up intending the gun to "jam" just to scare Sheila and give Cybil a bad name and lead Vil in the wrong direction.

GGGAAAAAAAA.....I gave in yet again, I have fed the evilness.

[SHALIK_TEX]

Great chapter, Can't wait for more.

[Fiferguy]

Great chapter Fel...

And Phantom, speaking of pills... Where are yours?

[Mistra]

isn't it kinda odd that someone shoots at the "stupid" cousin and the gun "accidentally jams" after wich the stupid cousin appears not to be so stupid after all...

kinda shady don't ya think


(btw fel, if you read this and it wasn't your original plan, PLEASE don't make sheila evil, i like the story the way it's going, an evil cat killing sheila would not be cool)

[Phantom]

Great chapter Fel...

And Phantom, speaking of pills... Where are yours?

Fifer, Fifer, Fifer

I've told you many many time's now ....I won't help you suport your habit.
Stop looking for any pills you think i might have..........
I'm don't have any to give you ....even if i did have some of them.

I mean just look at what happened to you the last time when you ended up in that episode of "COPS"

then there was that time with that Sheep......err i mean fur...yea thats it That Fur.
<shakes head>

By the Way isn't "Mist" still looking for you after that last time you decided to get Frisky?


Phantom

[Fiferguy]

Fifer, Fifer, Fifer

I've told you many many time's now ....I won't help you suport your habit.
Stop looking for any pills you think i might have..........
I'm don't have any to give you ....even if i did have some of them.

I mean just look at what happened to you the last time when you ended up in that episode of "COPS"

then there was that time with that Sheep......err i mean fur...yea thats it That Fur.
<shakes head>

By the Way isn't "Mist" still looking for you after that last time you decided to get Frisky?


Phantom

I wish you'd quit confusing me with your mom. It's really getting really annoying. I might have to see if I can't get some of the local Psions where you are to fix you a little more...

[Mizriath]

Ugh... I am late again.... and the story has moved on...

I must get more unbusy.

[canisd]

Just for that, chapter 14 will be released on Friday.

Friday, October 17, 2037.

Ummmm.... Fel, That's a Saturday not a Friday

Just saw the new chapter but no time to read now

[crxbnt]

Thanks for the chapter FEL. One complaint. It wasn't long enough!

I wanted to read for a couple of hours last night, and I managed that chapter in only 15 minutes, including interuptions! This is good literature. It is good technically, and the story is compelling and very believable. I hope that you are able to keep cranking out the story to us at a pace that keeps us from deperate actions! Soem of us are adicted to your writing.

Thanks.

crxbnt

[Mistra]

i might not be as perfect as i think, but 15 MINS??? how the hell did you pull it off?

[DigitalMaestro]

didn't take me more than 30 mins. probably 15 or so.

[TLGG]

Fel, I know you know it, but I still have to say it: you're my hero. Super fast posting, even if it wasn't one of your longest chapters.

isn't it kinda odd that someone shoots at the "stupid" cousin and the gun "accidentally jams" after wich the stupid cousin appears not to be so stupid after all...

kinda shady don't ya think

Yeah, hitmen these days don't know how to handle weapons. Who are rich kids going to turn to when they've got to kill someone; but then, what's the point of taking an indirect cousin out of the picture, I'm sure there are people that would inherit more money than her, she's probably not all that high in the target priority list.

[Hearly]

You also have to remeber thou, Vil has locked down everything in boston, trying to hire a Professional is prolly not possible right now without Vil knowing, so they would have to use wanna-be's

[TLGG]

You're right, and she's also from England, so she probably doesn't have too many contacts, but then she was working with someone else.

[Journeywoman]

Wow Fel, you're certainly pumping out these chapters. I don't start reading till a month after you start writing the story and bam your already up to Chapter 13 ! Not that I'm complaining but wow you must really be enjoying writing this one. I know I'm enjoying reading it.

There are a few things I would comment on however. One is the speed of the relationship, it does seem a little on the unbelievably fast side. I know you keep commenting on it within the story but I keep thinking like the parents: its unbelievably fast, especially for two people with so little dating experience, but heck it is your story. I am enjoying the characters, as a reader you do really get into them and I love the the different family dynamics. You have a real talent for keeping the reader engrossed. The last thing I would comment on is merely for when you get to editing: put in the Bengals(?) colours. You mention the Den is decked out in the colours but not what they are. Don't assume everyone knows what they are. I for one live in Australia, don't follow Rugby or AFL, let alone American football, so have no hope in hell of knowing.
All in all I'm enjoying the book!