Doesn't it though?Fel wrote:clearly, I must get out the whip.
WRITE FASTER! FASTER, DARN YOU!
*crack!*
My, it feels...good, to do that to someone rather than have it done to me.
Score!
The Fovean Chronicles Online - Need opinions
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Ignorance is bliss, knowledge is power. Are the powerful very unhappy?
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I have just recently found you story. I have just finished reading the first three chapters of book 1 and would like to read the rest before getting into book 2. If there is any way I could do this I would love to read it. So far I would like to say I enjoy your writing. You set a good introduction and have kept the flow going in a good direction. Well thats just my two cents... 

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When Life throws you Limes
Break out the Salt & Tequila
And have a Party.....
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Break out the Salt & Tequila
And have a Party.....
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You can read it right on the site - look at the bottom of the page and you can see a link either to Lulu.com or PayPal, where it will run you like $3.00SHALIK_TEX wrote:I have just recently found you story. I have just finished reading the first three chapters of book 1 and would like to read the rest before getting into book 2. If there is any way I could do this I would love to read it. So far I would like to say I enjoy your writing. You set a good introduction and have kept the flow going in a good direction. Well thats just my two cents...
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OK - updates are done up to chapter 42. If you've been following the story, I'd REALLY like some opinions on the new direction over the old from Chap 39 on.
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Book Two: Finished - now, let's see some comments
OK, guys - book two, Indomitus Oriens, is DONE.
Well, the rough is. As well you know, there's still the pass back and then the rewrite, then enough editing to choke a walrus.
But the words are all there, and you can see how it ends.
As long as I get comments, it will stay up. If not, well - I appreciate that a lot of you have put a lot of effort into reading me, and there WILL be autographed copies.
Let me know what you think, please!
Well, the rough is. As well you know, there's still the pass back and then the rewrite, then enough editing to choke a walrus.
But the words are all there, and you can see how it ends.
As long as I get comments, it will stay up. If not, well - I appreciate that a lot of you have put a lot of effort into reading me, and there WILL be autographed copies.
Let me know what you think, please!
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A Shakespearean ending...
You left a lot of dead bodies with protagonists finding Enlightenment at the end. You also left a lot of loose ends for you to easily enter into with the third book so that is good as well. Overall this has been a pretty entertaining read
Keep up the Good Work
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You left a lot of dead bodies with protagonists finding Enlightenment at the end. You also left a lot of loose ends for you to easily enter into with the third book so that is good as well. Overall this has been a pretty entertaining read


Keep up the Good Work

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Thanks - you've really spent some time reading me and I appreciate it
There's two things I'm worried about right now - does the beginning drag, and have I left enough room at the end for a proper conclusion?
I don't want to write a spoiler, but at the end you can see why they had to die. I'm wondering if I shouldn't shorten up the Battle of the Vice and spread the deaths out more
There's two things I'm worried about right now - does the beginning drag, and have I left enough room at the end for a proper conclusion?
I don't want to write a spoiler, but at the end you can see why they had to die. I'm wondering if I shouldn't shorten up the Battle of the Vice and spread the deaths out more
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